Wizard Kitchen Food

Wizard Kitchen Food

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BREAD WIZARD BREADMAKER KITCHEN BAKING HEALTHY FOOD
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Wizard Kitchen Food
do you think this story is good its a story about 3 wizards going to a wizard school?

I bolted out of my bed when I heard my adopted parents alarm clock go off. I have too hurry and go make breakfast before they get their,but I was too late. They had already showered and everything when I came up from the small i lived in. When i got to the kitchen my adoptive dad yelled "Where is my breakfast you freak?" When i didn't answer he hit me in the stomach andstarted ranting and yelling till he turned blue. "Now go make me some breakfast before your beloved mother wakes up." he hissed I hate that I have to live like a slave. I can't wait till I turn eight-teen then i can leave this place forever. "Are you finished with my food yet girl. If your not get ready for a beating freak." For some reason i got really mad. Madder then i usally do when he says that. Just then the plate he was holding exploded. I stared at it in shock. Did i do that or was it something else?

Now... this seems to me like a not-very-good rewrite of Harry Potter. Sorry, but I'm being honest. You have a poor, downtrodden kid living with abusive people who aren't her real parents, and she has strange powers to make plates explode. Great. Wonderful. One big cheesy cliche. And it's really not very well written at all. Work on your description and your sentence structure. I recommend that you read a lot more books before trying to write one.




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